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Wednesday, January 7, 2009

The Murder


She opened her eyes wide and stared at the dull, dusty ceiling fan. She could hear it again; the incessant knocking on her door. She had opened the door the first time and had found no on there. Frightened, she ran into her bedroom and curled herself up into a ball under the covers. An hour later, nothing had changed except that the birds had begun chirping and that the skies were turning into a pitch black at a rapid rate.

"Open the door!", a voice commanded. It was deep and husky and belonged to a man. She wondered what he looked like but was too afraid to look. She darted across the room into her kitchen and gulped down a glass of water that had been lying there for three days. The knocking ceased.

Sweating profusely, she tiptoed back into her bare living room and sat on the floor wondering what she should do. If he was a robber, she had nothing to offer him. She had only recently moved into this apartment and had nothing but expired milk and yogurt in the fridge, bare essentials to survive, and four walls around her. She also knew no man in any capacity in this town.

She sat there in pitch darkness and waited. All she could hear was the faint sound of a guitar playing somewhere outside. And then without warning, she saw the lock on her main door click and turn. A cold chill ran down her spine as she began to tremble not knowing what to do. There was nothing to hide behind or under and she had no idea where her cellphone was.

A moment later she screamed as a tall, dark, muscular man stood before her with angry glaring eyes. There was something familiar about him. She motioned him to stay away from her and began to walk backwards. He did nothing. He simply stood there looking at her in amusement. She screamed again. No one heard. No one but him and that made no difference. Very soon, she found herself in her kitchen groping for a knife. He merely smiled. She panicked.

5 minutes later, she was sobbing uncontrollably. She had flung a butcher knife at him which had managed to slit his throat. He had fallen on the floor with a loud thud, bleeding profusely, as his eyes rolled and stared into vacant space. She knew he was dead. She knew she was safe; that he could no longer trouble her every time she moved into a different city or apartment. She was finally free from the clutches of his evil being, she thought.

She quietly left her apartment to go buy sleeping pills. When she returned, she called 911 and informed them of a murder and a suicide. Then she took 10 of these pills and went back to her covers.

Three days later, she awoke in a loud and ugly hospital. At a distance, she saw her son talking to a man in a white coat who uttered one particular word several times.
"Schizophrenia".

This was not the first time she had heard it.

34 comments:

everything burns... said...

omg...wow... bt i being a lil slow didnt get 1 thng...th man wasnt real???

everything burns... said...

or ws it her son???

Pavi!!!! said...

Well written sneha.

A technical Q : Can the hallucinations actually get that bad? for ppl who suffer from the problem.
n is there a cure?

Ash said...

Fabulous!

Blue Kite Dreamz said...

Solt..
is it that the woman is only hallucinating and the man she imagined to have murdered was actually the doctor..i am confused....

or perhaps..

one part of her - the part A wanted to kill herself .

and part B wanted to save herself ....(Part A+ Part B)= Part C

..but then she killed Part A ,not knowing that now she was left with only Part B

and that she was only a Part D=(Part C - Part A) , now


With part A taken care of with the butchers knife...


she pops in 10 sleeping pills ( it IS a secret way of conveying that she called up someone.. a - perhaps a 10 digit number ?)


anyways...


Now the equation we arrive at is Part D = Part C.., Where everything sort of normalizes ...


I am still confused...am i turning into a ..Part Z..:)

Hemanth Potluri said...

awesome...it was like a thriller :)..

urs..hemu..

Ghost Particle said...

good flow, good twist. can you imagine how real this is nowadays...schiz. :( all i can remember is the movie A beautiful mind, how mind bending can this disease become.

Meera said...

Oh Chilly!

Satish Bolla said...

one small but inevitable doubt: did she kill someone innocent by mistake?

i liked the way u narrated the story. but didn't like the story much. comes under one of ur weakest. sorry to say so. u don't know how many times i typed these words n deleted them.

jus yesterday, i saw a telugu movie called "three" which deals with the same subject: "Schizophrenia". movie was boring because of the worst twists in the tale. was wondering the whole yesterday abt the spelling of this word "Schizophrenia"

Solitaire said...

@ Everything burns,

Several interpretations here. What stands out the most for you?

Solitaire said...

@ Pavi,

Yes Pavi. They can get really bad. Cure..I am not sure. Control, maybe yes.

Solitaire said...

@ Ash,

Thanks!

Solitaire said...

@ Satish,

If I told you that she did NOT kill anyone at all, would you change your opinion about the story? I think you did not understand it.

I think people really make a mockery out of the disorder when they try to portray it in Indian movies.

Solitaire said...

@ Meera,

Hmm..

Solitaire said...

@ Ghost,

It is always been this way. Just that people are now becoming aware of the disorder. And it is very hard for the Indian population to understand it. They often mistake it for multiple personality disorder which is so untrue.

Solitaire said...

@ Hemu,

Thanks!

Ghost Particle said...

true to what you say, they dont have any idea! population wise, the sufferers must be a lot. ive read the situation in China, many go untreated. Schizophrenia is the end stages right? before suicide?

τ ħ€ ĐάЎđяёάmёя said...

wow...nice story mam...

how u been???

Shruti said...

its this bad? :(
right.. so many interprettations.. well written as always Sneha.. :)

rain girl said...

deadly sweets, deadly... uh, in my language, that is a compliment...

loved it..and congrats for your story getting published..

Satish Bolla said...

@solitaire
oops, will read it again with a peaceful mind n let u know my comments again.

Hiren said...

too good :) ... a bit different than some of your earlier ones ... mainly on the open endedness part ...

just one doubt ... why did she try to commit suicide ? because she had murdered or are there suicidal tendencies amongst such patients?

Swati said...

Awesome..very nice !

c'est la vie said...

great read sneha. it is awesome. articulation of the plot is simply splendid.

Deepali said...

Like a lot of people don't know a great deal about schizophrenia so don't really know how I feel about the story because I didn't understand it.

Will figure more about scizo and will re-read the story.

Still thinking said...

Sorry I'm late, I really didn't know you'd posted.

As usual, your stories get me totally involved (and scare me a wee bit).

I can't find your book in my city and I'll try my best to get it soon. I'm sure I won't be disappointed.

nik said...

hmmmm ... i must admit i had to re-read the story a couple of times before I could start to understand the underlying message.

glad to see you back online. :)

Stupidosaur said...

Did her alternate personality forget a known person and kill him and then take the pills?

Or did the alternate personality which is itself a hallucination, hallucinate about murder and suicide while being in the hospital for treatment all the while? Or was the murdering part a hallucination and pills part real, landing her in hospital?

Anyways such stories are just not my type.

Stupidosaur said...

although when I first visited your blog (Through some trojan spirit I think), your cyclops picture provided a fitting ambience to dark stories ;)

Roney said...

wow ! it's very good narrative ! You have the quality in your writing...and you deserve to get published...well this first time I visited this blog...I'll try to become a regular reader...All the best and congratulations for your publication.

Adisha said...

Wow !!!

Stupidosaur said...

Umm u stopped publishing comments in general? Or my comments in particular? Or just because I won't let u see my pic you won't let me see my comment ? ;)

Vandita said...

I'm a lil confused, if she had a son im assumin he lived with her, how then did she have just the bare minimum like u described in her apt?
It sounded like she lived alone.
I guess im gettin confused coz I dunno much abt schizophrenia, will read up.

иidhi S said...

Wow..

Fabulaous...Amazing...gosh i just flowed into the story..so much so that i dint realise where I am