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Thursday, August 28, 2008

Soul-Mates



Warning: This story may be disturbing to some, especially minors.

Peter knew the moment he had set eyes on Jenny that they were meant to be together. His ex-wife had left him 6 months ago for another woman and Peter was lonely, de-motivated, and hopeless. He had not kissed any woman in over a year, let alone have sex with any. It almost seemed to him like his young adulthood was going to waste. At 35, he was single again. And now, he felt that this young waitress who had been serving him coffee every morning at the Express Cafe was his soul-mate.

Jenny was a strikingly attractive woman. There was no denying that she was perhaps one of the most beautiful waitresses that Peter had ever known. He was particularly attracted to her olive skin, her petite stature, and her well-toned body. Jenny on the other hand, had always been intuitive that Peter had been attracted to her, and was used to this kind of attention from the cafe's customers. However, this time, the feelings were mutual. So when Peter asked her out a few days later, she was ecstatic. Within 2 months, they legally wed in a small ceremony with only 5 invited guests.

The first few weeks of wedded bliss had filled their lives with love and contentment. They had their ups and downs but essentially felt that they would not be able to live without one another as they kissed, cuddled, hugged, and embraced each other every waking moment together. However, Jenny and Peter hardly made love because Jenny was not only frigid but also suffered from vaginismus. She often felt guilt-ridden and cried her heart out after Peter went to bed after hours of futile coaxing. She wanted to please him but she could not. She wondered if Peter would at any point want to leave her for another woman devoid of sexual problems.

One day, well into the 2nd year of their marriage, her fears came true. After spending minutes trying to penetrate her, Peter lost his cool. He dragged himself out of bed stark naked, walked out of the bedroom, and slammed the door behind him. "How many times have I told you to visit a therapist?", he yelled out. Jenny felt her heart breaking when Peter did not return to the bedroom for the rest of the night. The next day, he left home for work without even kissing her good bye. Jenny spent the entire day ruminating over her woes and her past. She thought about how her father had abandoned her and her mother when she were merely three. She thought about how her first boyfriend had raped her at a fraternity party never to meet her again. She thought about how her mother had died 5 years ago. And she thought about last night. Jenny filled the bathtub with water and spent the rest of the day laying there, thinking about how she could please her husband that evening.

When Peter returned home from work at 7 pm, he saw Jenny sprawled on the bed, with her eyes half-closed. Without a word, he went into the kitchen, and saw that she had made his favorite dinner: meatloaf. Heaping a huge portion onto his plate, he ate quickly, almost swallowing without chewing. He was experiencing a unique sense of excitement that night as he continued to think about Jenny waiting for him inside the bedroom. Brushing the crumbs of his sandwich, and leaving the dirty plate on their couch, he rushed into the bedroom stripping his own clothes off on the way.

Inside their bedroom, he turned the lights off and swiftly undressed Jenny. He then continued to blindfold her and kissed her entire body starting at her forehead and moving downwards in spirals until he reached her toes. His excitement and arousal knew no bounds as there was not a word of protest today. He smiled at himself. Finally, finally she was not rejecting him. Finally, he would be able to make love to her like he had always dreamed of. Finally, he would enjoy their union. In the next few minutes, Peter experienced pleasure like he never had, not even when he lost his virginity in college, and not even like how he had on his honeymoon with his first wife. He felt uniquely liberated as he came into his wife, grunting all the time, without worrying about what the neighbors thought.

A couple hours later, Peter called his friends and gave them the news about Jenny's suicide. She had killed herself that afternoon before he had gotten back from work.

126 comments:

HOBO said...

ohh !!!
:(

Winnie the poohi said...

wow girl! a killer story from you!

Just amazing!

Mel Avila Alarilla said...

What is intriguing in the story is how Peter never noticed that jenny was already dead when he was making love to her. Probably, he was so excited to even notice. That was a melodramatic story with a twisted ending. Thanks for the short story. God bless.

harish said...

I would have to say I am not entirely happy with this story...

Its not the question of me feeling uncomfortable and neither am I unconvinced about the fact that husbands do this to wives.

What I feel is that the whole having sex while his wife lays dead and getting satisfaction thing is a bit incredulous. I mean, unless he is heavily into necrophilia, there is no way he could not have realized it!

Cess said...

great story, lots of suspense! I don t know if in ur pic avatar it s really u, but if it is, u look so nice and it s impressive how u can wrote a dark/sad story like that!

Karthik said...

Why did she agree to marry him in the first place? I mean a traumatic experience like she had would have made her think twice before going for a marriage.

Vrij said...

Amazing story babes... truely gripping!

Rohit Tripathi said...

:-( ohhhhhhh



New Post :
मेरी पहली कविता...... अधूरा प्रयास

Srijith Unni said...

I'm sort of like dumbfounded after reading this on.. I know you often make your stories real tragic at times.. but this time there was just something else..

So what happened between Jenny and Peter.. Was it love..? or was their marriage an hurried decision taken out of mere lust.? Was sex the only objective.? What happens to women who have such problems, in the real world..?

I'm seriously disturbed, Soli.!

Take Care and God Bless!
~Srijith.

DreamCatcher said...

"Ram Gopal Verma" is waiting for such a script, Give him some Gyaan abt Good Script. :)
But India mein aisi movie nahi chalegi!
Overall, I like the story, u sure know how to play with Emotions!!

Ne said...

OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

That was sooo amazing. You know how to tell a story! Wow what some people will do make another happy!

I like this story Soli!!

Ne.

Kris Bass said...

Fantastic story. Did you by any chance read my lame-ass attempt at one? It was called pink and it has some similarities to this.

Stupidosaur said...

Half way through it was obvious what would happen. Considering who wrote the story and the initial warning, and 'sudden self-control' of Jenny overcoming her problem which is not so voluntarily controlable.

Or maybe it was not very obvious. Then I have overactive imagination.

Stupidosaur said...

but isn't therapy better than suicide?

(Oh wait, even those who commit suicide could have better gone for therapy rather than commit suicide. Maybe I am asking wrong questions of an 'ideal world')

Stupidosaur said...

But in ideal world nobody would want to commit suicide in first place. So ideal choice between suicide vs therapy would be out of question

Pavi!!!! said...

u know wat..i find it impossible to believe or digest the fact that a man can make love to a being that is not alive...n even enjoy or get pleasure out if it !

Vrij said...

@ Pavi

U find it difficult to believe that someone could get pleasure fucking a dead woman.. true.. but do u think some bozo could get pleasure raping a 2 year old??? And we see that happening ever so often in our holy land :(

♪♪HARINI♪♪ said...

hey first time im visiting your blog.. lovoed it...
really nice story, sad ending thoug, but simply superb!
am blogrollin ya..
ciao round

Tuhin said...

read ur story..thought for a while..then thought of Clerks (movie) and then found myself on the floor!

Great twist, but isn't it a bit unrealistic? I mean the lovemaking part.

Jack said...

Solitaire,

OMG! Very sad and hurting. Why could she not go to a therapist?

Take care

Prakhar said...

amazed by the wide spectrum of your thoughts!!...story is very aptly named Soul-Mates!

Neeku said...

=(

Don't give the warning solitaire ! it made me expect the ending... If I hadn't known the warning... then the ending would have surprised me...

But then... really nicely written (as always!)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

hoo...
that was a twist...
nice story line....

Solitaire said...

@ Hobo,

I know!

Solitaire said...

@ Winnie,

WOW! You got here so quick.

Thanks!

Solitaire said...

@ Mel,

Is that how you interpreted it? Maybe he did. We do not know.

Thanks for visiting.

Solitaire said...

@ Harish,

**I would have to say I am not entirely happy with this story...

Okie!

**Its not the question of me feeling uncomfortable and neither am I unconvinced about the fact that husbands do this to wives.

Husbands do "what" to wives?

**What I feel is that the whole having sex while his wife lays dead and getting satisfaction thing is a bit incredulous. I mean, unless he is heavily into necrophilia, there is no way he could not have realized it!

So who says he is NOT into necrophilia?

Solitaire said...

@ cess,

Thank you!! That is ME! I am assuming you are looking at the picture next to SOLITAIRE right? Cos the picture in the story is not me! :)

My stories are usually dark. Glad you appreciated it.

Solitaire said...

@ Karthik,

Why would she NOT agree to marry him? I don't understand the reasoning. There are many women with traumatic pasts who are happily married.

Solitaire said...

@ Vrij,

thank you!

Vandita said...

he made love to her dead body?? how cud he not have known...??
just!
also aint there a cure for vaginismus?

Solitaire said...

@ Rohit,

:(

Will visit soon.

Solitaire said...

@ Srijith,

Oh no! Don't be disturbed. :(
But I guess you cannot help it.

***So what happened between Jenny and Peter.. Was it love..? or was their marriage an hurried decision taken out of mere lust.? Was sex the only objective.? What happens to women who have such problems, in the real world..?

What do you think happened between Jenny and Peter? Its very open to interpretation. I think loneliness caused them to seek each other out and live under illusion of a perfect world. Women who do have such problems can receive treatment to live their lives better.

Solitaire said...

@ Dreamcatcher,

Haha!! Maybe we can convince RGV to make a hollywood film on this! Thanks a ton!

Solitaire said...

@ NE,

Thanks! Do you think she did this to end her own misery or to make her husband happy?

Solitaire said...

@ Kris,

Thanks! No I have not. But will do so as soon as I visit you again.

Solitaire said...

@ Stupid,

I know the warning makes it obvious but I really did not want to traumatize the young ones who read my blogs such as Meghna and Aayushi. So I would sacrifice the unpredictability part for their protection.

How do we know that she has never tried therapy in the past? How do we know that suicide is her first resort? Such things cannot be deciphered from a short story especially when she has such a loaded past.

Solitaire said...

@ Pavi,

Never heard of necrophilia?

Salil said...

Hi,
This is definitely a disturbing story. But nicely written. Will be back for more.
Cheers,
Salil

Karthik said...

Solitaire,
What I meant was she could have one for therapy first. Anyway there was a film like this starring Richard Attenborough in which he played the role of a doctor who is like the male potrayed through your tale. Will tell you the name once I successfully find it. Good Post!

Ajnabi said...

nice blog and interesting posts..!!!

Great story...

how abt twisting the end in same way by adding some ghost element in this story?

Cheers!!!

* btw why do you prefer dark stories ?

ki said...

oh my god. wow. I love it!

Keshi said...

how can anyone make love to a dead body?

Keshi.

Ankur said...

:)

u already know i dont like sad stories... but yes as a story i liked it!!

though i felt it, when u said she was lyin on the bed when he came back!!

poor souls... :)
and this is the Irony called love...

sometimes we do a lot in love, which is not to be done... but there are no ethically correct answers there... If life and living wudnt have been so important then this wud be called the biggest gift one cud ever gift!! !:)

nice one!! :)

Cheers!!!

Lakshmi said...

well, i dont know what to say

harish said...

oh...man....is he??
im a knucklehead...well, that puts the story in awhole new perspective...

but still....somewhere, something's missing...kya boloon, dum nahi hai, yaar!

I absolutely loved "With Love from Bangladesh" and other stories...

rantravereflect/ jane said...

:(:(:(:(:(

i dunno what to sayyy :(
awesum ending!

**doesn't the vagina experience rigor mortis??
:(

Jack said...

Solitaire,

On thinking again, they were together for 2 years why did he not take her for professional advice?

Take care

Pavi!!!! said...

@sol: no. i hadn't heard of it, but looked it up. so now i know wat it is.
But i'm thinking that necrohphillac(sorry if thats not a word!)trait was never displayed by him earlier in the story rite?

He apparently was attracted to & fell in love with jenny n then married her. she hadn't told him abt her problem n thats what lead to the misunderstanding n frustration.

but ya..ANYTHING can happen in this world..so i get ur point.

@Vrij: Yes, fathers rape daughters, so mabbe this happens too!

Rushabhh Gandhi said...

F u c k!!!!! :O :O

I dun know whether you have written this in the form of a story or some true story.......

But its sad that such things do happen in reality... Its Sad But True!!!!

AmitL said...

Hi,Sol..you were right,in the warning..the story was a bit disturbing.A somewhat extreme case..but,only you could have written is so nicely,to convey that yes,such human tendencies do exist!

comfortably numb said...

it was sort of obvious halfway through...but seriously, the guy needs to be really cracked up not to notice tht he's making up to a dead body!!!

Liberal said...

Wow! The concept was heathen and out there...but the righting is sheer excellence

Pranay said...

U know wat gujju ben ;), nothin in ur stories surprise me anymore...no disclaimers required, well may be for the newcomers....
Dont know wat makes ur mind go to such subjects!!!!
But as with all d other stories of yours, liked it a lot!!

Pranay said...

Commenting again after reading so many comments saying he should have known he was making love to a dead body!
I think the only thing dat could make him think something like that was because she wasn't moving at all or had no expressions.
But considering she had such problems, it is understandable he thought she was just controlling the pain by lying still.
The time of death is not known...Rigor mortis sets in around 4-6 hrs after death, give and take a few depending on conditions.
He definitely isnt a necrophiliac as he didnt know she was dead and then d story isnt as shocking.

Solitaire said...

@ Harini,

Hey! Thanks for stopping by and your lovely comment. Will see you around!

Solitaire said...

@ Tuhin,

Is it really? Maybe in your world. Not his.

Solitaire said...

@ Jack,

Many people resist therapy for many reasons. Considering her past, I am sure she had ample valid justifications to not go.

Thanks!

Solitaire said...

@ Prakhar,

Thank you! My mind is a bit twisted so....

Solitaire said...

@ Neeku,

Have to give the warning cos there are some minors reading this and I do not want them to get disturbed!!

Thanks!!

Solitaire said...

@ Vinz,

Thank you!

Solitaire said...

@ Vandita,

Maybe he did know!

Yes there is a cure for it but one has to go for treatment, right? This woman did not!

Solitaire said...

@ Salil,

Sorry for the disturbing story! :)

Thanks!! See you around!

Solitaire said...

@ Karthik,

Thanks! Please do share the name of the movie. I would like to see it.

Solitaire said...

@ Ajnabi,

Ghost? Hmmmm..interesting aspect. Never thought about it.Never tried my hand at horror or suspense. Should give it a shot! Thanks!

And yes, I like dark stories cause they reflect the reality of so many lives that we are all oblivious to and pretend that they never exist.

Solitaire said...

@ Ki,

Thanks!!! :)

Solitaire said...

@ Keshi,

You might want to ask that to someone who suffers from necrophilia.

Solitaire said...

@ Jack,

He tried, remember? But she resisted.

Prakhar said...

chal chal twisted mind...JigSAW ban na hai tujhe :P

Hiren said...

nicely written as always ... there are some arguments that struck my mind .... but doesn't matter ... i am sure this is a fictional story ... and for that its wonderfully scripted ...

Still thinking said...

You are a brilliant writer Sol!!! I'm sooo glad now that I stumbled to your blog a few weeks ago.

There is only one point I really find difficult to u'stand is that Peter was so u'standing, kind and loved Jenny so much that he was also being supportive by asking her to see a Therapist, then how did he culminate as a necrophile. Yes, who would know that he already could have been one but there were no signs???

U see how you got the readers so involved now! :)

Nice story.

P.S. When I read the first few lines I almost thought it would end like the movie 'Feast of Love'.

Aditya said...

nicely woven ... a treat to read :D

I am said...

BANG!!!

I was thinking on the same lines as I read your story...but I am not sure if one can make love to a dead body..

Anu said...

Woah.. i was shocked..that was really sad in a way.. also didnt he realize she was cold..?

Keshi said...

**You might want to ask that to someone who suffers from necrophilia

I dunno wut necrophilia is. That may be why I asked u Sol. d u expect the whole world to be shrinks and u'stand what every ailment is and how such ppl behave?

:)

Keshi.

Shrutilaya said...

Wommmaaann!

You writing is brilliant!

I am officially a huge fan!

Solitaire said...

@ Jane,

What is rigor mortis? Translate please.

Solitaire said...

@ Harish,

Haha!! You are not a knucklehead. The story is too short to have all the details in them.

Solitaire said...

@ Ankur,

Hmmmm interesting perspective. So you thought that she gave up herself so that her husband could make love to her dead body and view it as a gift?

Solitaire said...

@ Lakshmi,

Aww..its ok!

Solitaire said...

@ Pavi,

I am not that well-versed with necrophilia but it could be that this was the first instance that his symptom showed. For every disorder, there is a first time. Not that people are born with it. If you look up the reasons why people engage in this behavior, you will understand why he chose to make love to her corpse.

Thanks for looking it up yourself. :)
I don't like explaining disorders here.

Solitaire said...

@ Rushabhh,

This is strictly fictional but such things do happen. Rarely, though.

Solitaire said...

@ Amit,

Thanks!!! I know I write quite some morbid stories and felt like this one would be more disturbing than others since it contains concepts quite foreign to those who are not in the same field as me.

Solitaire said...

@ Comfortably,

Why do you assume that he did not know all along?

Solitaire said...

@ Liberal,

Thanks a ton!

Ankur said...

**So you thought that she gave up herself so that her husband could make love to her dead body and view it as a gift?

yes... i thought of it, coz when one wants to make other happy, either they participate themselves in the act or give up on themselves!!

technically, its not possible to make love happily with a dead body, but the purity in ur story is real!!! :)

sometimes, ur story depicts a lot of pain, and u let it come out!! :)

and thanks abt the perspective, but thats wat i have learned, its better to give up sometimes to make sm1 else happy!! everyone has a story, isnt!! :)

Solitaire said...

@ Pranay,

Thanks!! I do write morbid stories because this is the reality in many people's lives and I see this everyday day in and day out. I would really like to write about things that make people smile but somehow I feel that is quite shallow and short-lived.

Solitaire said...

@ Pranay,

I like how my story is really short and a quick read. Some people interpret it as loose endings. I like to say that I am leaving quite a bit of imagination to the readers. Some say he was unaware that he was making love to a dead body and that is quite plausible with the explanation you have given. Some say that she did it on purpose for love and that he knew it and accepted the gift. And some say he is suffering from necrophilia ( an idea that I agree with). Its all up to you! No right or wrong answers.

Solitaire said...

@ Prakhar,

No jigsaw, only solitaire...with a few cracks here and there. :)

Solitaire said...

@ Hiren,

:)

Thanks! Yes it is purely fiction. I know it seems like there are some loose ends but I guess that happens when I want to keep it short.

Solitaire said...

@ Still thinking,

***You are a brilliant writer Sol!!! I'm sooo glad now that I stumbled to your blog a few weeks ago.

Oh thank you!! I hope you keep visiting even though the stories are quite sporadic in coming.

***There is only one point I really find difficult to u'stand is that Peter was so u'standing, kind and loved Jenny so much that he was also being supportive by asking her to see a Therapist, then how did he culminate as a necrophile. Yes, who would know that he already could have been one but there were no signs???

What are the signs of someone being necrophile? do you know? Cos I surely don't. And whether or not he was understanding all of those two years or not is a mystery, right?

***U see how you got the readers so involved now! :)

Nice story.

Haha!! Good for me! :)

***P.S. When I read the first few lines I almost thought it would end like the movie 'Feast of Love'.

I might be a good story-writer but bad at watching and remembering movies. What is this movie about?

Solitaire said...

@ Aditya,

Thank you!

Solitaire said...

@ Keshi,

No not really. Even I do not know how one can enjoy making love to a dead body so thought it would be better you would ask someone who suffers from necrophilia rather than me. I personally do not know of anyone like that but if I do meet one, I will ask them.

Solitaire said...

@ Anu,

Read up about necrophilia. You might be shocked when you know more about it but it might make a few things clear.

Thanks for stopping by!

Solitaire said...

@ I am,

Many people do. Its very disturbing to read such stories but I have read quite some on wikipedia.

Solitaire said...

@ Shrutilaya,

Oh thank you!! :)

Ria said...

shit!!i mean why?? Why did she do this?? Is it tht she felt used or something....she did hav a very sad past. The story really moved me. How do u think of such things gurl!?

iriz said...

ohmygosh!

great way of delivering a story! that must be creepy i should say!

two thumbs up!

Think Tank said...

shit ...dat really hurt ..I guess Peter was right in his own way ..but shit man ..deres more to love dan just sex..so beinga feminist ..damn peter

C R D said...

woah...a typical gripping and shocking solitaire-story :)

i really envy ur imaginative powers..wanna be able to write like u some day

btw updated my blog..another doodle this time

cheers
Chris

zombey_-/\-_ said...

amazing!!

Sarath said...

a shocker of an ending. you have good story writing skills.

thanks for visiting my blog.

Karthik said...

Solitaire,
10 Rillington Place is the movie. But it's not exactly necrophilia. More about a psychopath doctor. Nevertheless watch it when you get time.

The Perfect Imperfectionist !! said...

Hey Ms. Solitaire.

Thanks for your comments on my post. I am just starting off with this blogging.

But you are damn good at it. I guess I can take some tips from you ;)

The Story was a jammer :B, expressive way of writing.

I really like the way you write.

- Abhee

ash89 said...

omg! amazing story!

utopia said...

that was morbid. sigh!

Diana said...

Pause............

Diana said...

That just sent a chill down my spine...Mann....What a story....

Beautiful naration......and the ending was so brilliant....

Do u write for any magazine?

Diana said...

It just leaves me with one question...Was Sex the only motive behind the marriage?

Compassion Unlimitted said...

A weird numbness is sinking in..
What do you describe this disorder as ? I mean the one on the hero( or villain ) of the story

TC
CU

djs said...

You are a very gifted writer. Bit dark for sure :)But thats just you are going for.
You seem pretty aware of the darkness of this world and dont sugar coat much. Perhaps your work brings you too close to reality every day.
Not every writer have the guts to write about the dark side of the world since people expect fiction to transport them from the real world to a dreamland.
Keep up the gud work and keep resisting the pressure to write the run of the mill "they lived happily after" fairy tales. We have enough of those :)

ceedy said...

As always lot is left to the readers imagination and one cannot assume even tho there are certain obvious signs that love overtook logic here...

All such different types of people exist. Each of them have different backgrounds...and one can discuss it and find a way out...instead of struggling and hiding....i just feel that in the first two months before marriage maybe they could have opened up to each other...(imagining)

All in all an interesting story...

s.H.a.S.h.I said...

hmmm .. i hate suicide stories... its surprising tht sexual satisfaction was the root cause for her death and perhaps their marriage too... sex is of course important but thers more to life than just sex..

Pinku said...

gosh thats so well written...i have goosebumps all over.

akanksha said...

My first visit here...
I Have no words...It was just amazing!

Vicky said...

One prob with ur blogs is - there are too many comments already, everytime i visit any post; even though I follow your blogs through feed-reader, which shows me your latest posts as soon as they r online. I don't feel like commenting any more after that.

Anyway, the story end was predictable to me. And, making love to a dead body is creepy.

Veens said...

is this really possible... to not knw.. if the wife is dead...whie having sex... i dnt knw...

enchanted illusionz said...

not many luv readin sad stories, but den life is not alwz a happie happie kahani...must really appreciate hw u weave a world toh tragic yet true...u are an awesome writer

иidhi S said...

Shit..!! giral.as always great gripping story but then again, sad ..really sad... feel like hitting the hard.

dnt tell me, its smwhere related to reality, but anything is possible.

Meghna said...

I'm a minor :(

But I jst cldnt miss this one and I'm glad...ur stories leave a deep impact on teh mind...literally!!

DewdropDream said...

Gripping!! Sad the way it went, but was riveting. You've been blogrolled! Please exuse my lateness in dropping in here!!

PrAcHi said...

Oh god! This is sooo disturbing! :’( How, someone who loves the woman, can treat her like this?! What disturbs me more is HOW can he do this to her? How can a person have sex with his own dead wife, and njoy it. Didn’t he love her? Or that was only lust? Is a woman the only object of sex? If she’s suffering form vaginismus then does she become useless? Way did they get married at first then? Didn’t she tell him abt her? If she really wanted to make him happy, why she didn’t go to the doctor?! I don’t know if the story is true, but no proper communication lead to whatever happened with Peter and Jenny! That’s what implies to me. When you have problem, you shud talk and solve it.. :(

Scribblers Inc said...

do I see someone writing dark stuff??I like it...ohhhh you bet I like it!!:D

Scribblers Inc.

skeptic saint said...

dark and gripping...

Tarun said...

This thing shook me up.I may never can completely comprehend it at all.

But this has shaken and stirred.

ЅΗΑЅΗІ said...

wow....now thats a great read.... blown my head out of proportions..... tagging you...