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Tuesday, March 18, 2008

Innocent Love


He heard the doctor say, "kidney stones" several times and had no idea what they were. All he knew was that his father was not feeling well and that their mother was hardly home. And then one fine day, when he was only 13, his father died. As aunts and uncles came home to comfort his mother, him, and his younger sister, grieving, wailing, and moaning, he heard them say, "You are now the man of the house" over and over again.

Days turned into months and gradually he realized that relatives no longer stopped by. His mother was snickered at in social gatherings for wearing bright colors, putting on a huge bindi, and chewing tobacco despite being a widow. He never understood what the big deal was just like he never understood why his mother was never home, even in the evenings. But one evening, as he rocked himself on their antique swing in their yard, waiting for nightfall so that he could cry himself to sleep, he saw his mother bring home a stranger.

He was surprised. They never had any visitors. And yet, this man's demeanor seemed like he was strangely comfortable with his mother. That night, his mother told him and his sister that she was in love, and was going to marry this strange man. The 42-year-old lanky man with grey hair and smelly feet would now be his step-father. He retreated to his room without much display of emotion. After all, he was the man of the house. And men don't cry. They only toss and turn for hours before they fall asleep at dawn in an eerie house.

Weeks later, when he was convinced that he had lost his mother's love to the stranger who never came home after that, he saw HER, the love of his life. She was sitting demurely on the couch watching TV with a vacant gaze that made her look even beautiful. "How is it that I hardly talk to her when she is so beautiful?", he thought. He approached her without any hesitation as if he had done this all his life. He sat down next to her and asked her how she was. She turned her head towards him, and instantly burst into tears. "I feel so lost", she said. "Shhhh...I am with you." he responded, as he cradled her, stroking her curly hair, and resting her head on his shoulder. That day, they watched TV together, hand in hand. That night, he fell asleep, with a smile on his face.

As months passed, their love for each other blossomed. When his mother was gone in the evenings, he spent every moment with her. They hugged, held hands, kissed, giggled, had pillow fights, snuggled, and gave each other everything that was missing from their lives..LOVE, COMFORT, COMPANIONSHIP. His mother had no idea what her son was upto for she never returned before midnight by which he was always fast asleep in his bedroom.

One evening, he overheard his mother talking to the strange man. And he realized that she would not return home that night before 2 am. He felt elated. These days he looked forward to some alone time, unlike the times when he would crave for his mother's company. Without a tinge of guilt, he realized that tonight was the night that he could plan something. Something romantic..for the love of his life.

That evening, after dinner, he invited her into his bedroom. She coyly observed the candles that lit the room brightly. "Is this for me?", she giggled nervously. "Yes", he said, and pulled her towards him. "Did you like it?", he asked. She could barely answer him as she felt his lips against his neck and as his hand unbuttoned her shirt gingerly. "Oh my God!", should we be doing this, she whispered. He chose not to answer her. Within minutes, they were sprawled on his bed, half naked. While in their own little paradise, they did not hear the door open, and their mother enter his bedroom. She screamed as she saw both her children in bed together....

73 comments:

Ankur said...

She sittin on the couch, and he realized he didnt talk to her enough!!!
I said to myself, no ways, u cant take it like this... and u did :)
Cruel yet possibility of truth...

A Story well written!!!

Nice post, Cheers!!!

Pavi!!!! said...

Well narrated..n i saw that coming yeah...
physical relationship between siblings..is being talked about more these days..Im not sure how many yrs it'll be before at least some people begin to accept it.Do u think that day will come?

Keshi said...

**She screamed as she saw both her children in bed together....

WUTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT??

Keshi.

Satish Bolla said...

a li'l bit predictable. i suspected the end in the middle itself. but the narration was awesome and this is the reason that made the story worth enough to read till end.

Deepti said...

Well written.. the end was awesome.. unpredictable ...

Amrith said...

hmmmm.... mixed feelings on this post actually...didnt guess the end tho, thought she might be a figment of his imagination.
My fav stories of yours are "The letter" and "Text Message"..

Zee said...

oh my god!!!! horrid!!!!!!!!!!!

Sam said...

something which can very well be the truth for many households!!!

rayshma said...

loved the narrative...

Compassion Unlimitted said...

You kept it going,till the end.These things do happen ,i understand,but sometimes very difficult to gulp..beautiful narration
TC
CU

Reign said...

oh my gosh!
what an end!
their mom must be in extreme trauma for what her naked eyes had seen.

nice story. ;)

Solitaire said...

@ Ankur,
Why did you think I would not take it that way? I have actually witnessed something very similar in real life. This is more fact than fiction.

@ Pavi,
These days a lot of people are having incestual relationships. People like to believe that that is prevalent only in Western cultures. But I beg to differ. Its going to take decades before people start accepting the truth.

Solitaire said...

@ Keshi,
Why are you so shocked girl? Did you not see it coming? Its becoming a bitter truth of many families.

@ Satish,
Thank you. Its rather sad that my readers here are rather wrapped up with the ending of my stories. Hindi movies always have a predictable end. Boy weds girl, villain dies, and everyone lives happily ever after. And yet we continue watching them.

Solitaire said...

@ Deepti,
Thank You. You are one of the few so far who have said that the end is unpredictable.

@ Amrith,
Thanks! I barely remember the names of my stories. I am surprised that you do!

@ Zee,
I know. Horrid but sadly true.

Solitaire said...

@ Sam,
Rightly said. It is the truth for many families. Some choose to ignore it.

@ Rayshma,
Thank you!

@ Compassion,
Thank you!! Sad facts of life are always difficult to digest. These things are unacceptable but they do occur.

Ankur said...

well, i thought u wont go to it coz its cruel!!!

ya, the incestual relationships is becoming a reality, but the question is whether is right or wrong, i am noone to decide, but my personal view is that such relationships are not good for anyone, sex is a desire, not a need, and definitely not a compulsion...

When you say its more than fiction, than i do agree with you, but isnt it shocking!!!

U know at times i wonder, is it really prevalent in Western Culture, i dont think so personally, it may be more prevalent in India coz we dont have the liberty to have sex when and with whom we want(in case the other one agrees).Here a relationship is not taken to that level until unless there is a feeling of doing the same by both the parties, and i m talkin abt most cases. Yes we are growing up, doin things we want to, but still even healthy sex relationships cant be talked abt, coz its a taboo, and certainly pre-marital sex is a stigma.

I think theres a difference in my thinking of accepting the truth and acknowleding it is as something acceptable.

Cheers!!!


P.S. I visit coz i like to read what u like, so thanks to u that these blogs of urs r open to public. :)

Chriz said...

aiyo.. where did my comment go?

Chriz said...

yes i have done an interview with sibling lovers.. everyone has a dark- pyschological background.. very well scripted

SambY said...

Well written... even though knowing what would be the end your narration held me to read it till the end... about what you say about incest relations... I do not know about relative prevalence of it in the indian society as compared to the western society... but yes it exists in many forms... and i have 2 such caes in real life... one even in close relations... Thses things are generally not discussed .. kept under the tabs.. maybe a few years.. after which these things might come to light....

SambY said...

and i loved how you left a cliffhanger ending to the story... hmm... i wonder what did the mother did ??? was the boy imagining it all ?? or what???

Rereading the story once lolz.. it does not seem the the end is predictible or unpredictible.. its not there... story does not end here...

Solitaire said...

@ Ankur, thank YOU for coming back over and over again to read my blogs AND spending valuable time and effort in commenting.

@ Chriz, which comment?! Maybe you should write about those interviews some day.

@ Samby, so thrilled to see you here. You thought outside of the box. People are wrapped up with the end, beginning, climax, plot what not...but you give it another viewpoint. Awesome!

Ankur said...

it sounds sarcastic to me... :P

Solitaire said...

@ Ankur..oh no..please do not tell me you are one of this disbelieving kinds.

Ankur said...

generally m not.. but now everything moving in this direction..


ok.. if u being sarcastic.. dont publish this... and i wont repeat the mistake of commenting!!! :)

Ankur said...

wat... did u even read it??? :P

Solitaire said...

@ Ankur, I published it..which means I was not sarcastic.

Ankur said...

then i m doing alright!! :D

Ankur said...

thankya thankya...

:D

SambY said...

well i dunno.... really this story is just the tip of the ice berg... what if the mother flips out and tel everyone.. these both become outcasts.. and go away somewhere...

Hmm.. what if the mother beats the hell out of each of them n they keep off their hands from each other...

Lolz..what if the gal get s married at a later stage ..and them sleeptalks al thisi to her husband.. bechara.. i pity him

Lolz.. n being the alien and the conspiracy buff that i am.. maybe they both have a child later and it turns out to be a alien... who plans to take over the earth..but then brave son of india samby enters and saves the world.. lolz ab yeh wala jyada ho jayega.... ...


Haha.. this story his much more probable endings than most of the other stories..

Its not even a story.. can be called a social report in the form of a siry like narrative.. wtf?? I wrote that...???

cheerz...

hope thAT all tat makes some sense

Satish Bolla said...

@samby
even though this is a serious region of the bloggerville, i couldn't help laughing at ur alien part. lol

SambY said...

UNRELATED

I seem to realise that u are a psycologist... wil u do me a favor...

http://enduringspirit.blogspot.com/2008/03/i-started-thinking-about-this-post.html

plz tell me if i need help... It does nt bother me much.. but it does bother me sumtimes.. n i hate it...

Thanx...

Mishra said...

Post is a Beauty.Would be a pleasure if you check out this creation which was written 2 years back::
http://jammag.com/campus/index.php?section_id=11&article_id=497&submit=Go

They messed up the heading though.Wonder if I could have your feedback on this..Cheers ~

Friendly nextdoor guy said...

yummm yumm

Vicky said...

Leaving a comment here as there's no other way to reach you -

I must say - U write well. Hell Yeah. I mean, this happened for the 1st time ever that I subscribed to all of the blogs of a single person. Well, missed out on the two blogs of your that are 'invite only'. Hope to read 'em someday.

Till then, joie de vivre.

Tip : U can use a contact form on your blogs. Try Wufoo.

Solitaire said...

@ Samby, I cannot find that post anymore.

SambY said...

@ S

http://enduringspirit.blogspot.com/
2008/03/i-started-thinking-about
-this-post.html

SambY said...

http://
enduringspirit.blogspot.com/2008/03/
i-started-thinking-about-this-post.
html

Solitaire said...

@ Samby, I read your post and commented to0. Would you like to take up the challenge of writing a second part of this story about what happened from then on? I am serious about this.

@ Mishra, thank you jee.

@ Friendly, yummmm? what part?

Solitaire said...

@ Mishra, I read the post but somehow could not comment there. The post is well-written, excellent, in fact. But the story seems to be one of the many scenes already seen in hindi movies.

SambY said...

@ ss

yes , from your comment i guess u are serous.. so am I.... I have never faced rejection.. but lost so many good chances due to the fear of it.. I really want all this to stop... 20 years have gone... gmme a week to put this in practice.. And then will let you know..

I am grateful then u have gone out of your way to help a 24x 24 pixel virtual friend

cheerz

Solitaire said...

@ Vicky, thank you! If you want access to the "woes" blog, drop me your email address and will send you an invite. STOP is only for women. sorry!

d SINNER!!! said...

gal...

wud u call it 'incest'?

somehow I won't!!! even if i sound awkward...

lemme know...

Pavi!!!! said...

@ Solitare : We have discussed this topic before on ur post..yes, its probably becoming more common these days..n frankly its not v.healthy.

I guess a zillion yrs ago..people got into a physical relationship mainly to make babies. In many communities it used to be (and is yet) a common practice to marry within the family..for eg marry cousins.n research has proved that babies made by members of the same family have more chances of deformities. So that is why probably centuries back physical relationships between sibling wasn't encouraged.

Mel Avila Alarilla said...

That was a beautiful love story, so engrossing and spellbinding but the ending was so shocking, my jaw almost fell down from my mouth. That's the problem with children being left alone all by themselves. Sometimes, the urge of carnality become such an irresistible force that result in cases of shocking incest. Your story telling style is so good and engrossing. I would give it a perfect 10. Thanks for the fantastic post. God bless.

Chriz said...

yes wud write about in someday soon

Chriz said...

but they are serious subjects.. wud have to add a tinch of humor in it cos my blog is in the HUMOR stream...

c e e d y said...

Very well written. This is a common thing in Parsi community, not necessarily between siblings but they do marry withing the family...it has genetic problems where the bad genes are multiplied over and over again.
They do have many health issues.

With the way things are - where people are becoming more and more lonely - this could very well be accepted in the future as any other kind of relationship.

freesherry said...

hmm... I am not surprised they turned to each other this way

Macadamia The Nut said...

Stark reality! But very well written!

Vicky said...

What do u do at 'STOP' ...?? Male bashing...?

:P Just kiddin.

Would love to get access to 'Woes'. Mail id is - vicky.codemaster@gmail.com

Thanks.

Standbymind said...

A well written piece indeed!

Solitaire said...

@ D Sinner, yes, I would. Technically, the definition requires sexual intercourse. I think they were on their way to that. Why do you think differently?

@ Pavi, yes possible. Ceedy has also mentioned the Parsi community in his comment.

Solitaire said...

@ Mel, thank you so much for your kind words. BTW, did you fix that problem on your site? I am so afraid to come there now.

@ Chriz, really? Will writing about it in a humorous fashion take away its impact?

@ Ceedy, I do not know if it will be better accepted in non-parsi communities or not but yes, I think we might see more of this happening. Not only in Western cultures but also in Eastern cultures where dating and premarital sex may continue to be a taboo.

Solitaire said...

@ Freesherry, hai na? And yet people will judge them and admonish them.

@ Macadamia, thank you!!!

@ Vicky, nope not yet. Only some bitching. I am sure you are not interested in that. Did you get the invite?

@ Standbymind, thank you!!

d SINNER!!! said...

Literally, i agree with it being incest...

but leave the technical or the literal part...what else can we expect in such situations...

vEENs said...

well.... i was thinkin when u said he was looking and sitting on his coach...i thought it was seone inside the family...well...sister!

but... well... seriously...wow!

u wrote it better than neone did :)

Vicky said...

Hey, thanks a lot. I did get the invite. But, am not able to subscribe to it's feeds. It asks for some password and Google id is not helpin. :(

Patchez said...

Well, yea i know this is happening in many families.... :(

bitter truth..

just that beautiful narrative of yours :)

backpakker said...

ummm, always wondered how and why incest happens ..

Prachi said...

very well narrated. a part of my mind has realised that it was coming, just tht it wanted something else to happen. alas...

thats the way the bitter reality goes.

cheers. :)

Solitaire said...

@ D sinner, yes. The kids were drawn into that situation because of their own needs that were not being satisfied by their parent.

@ Veens, thanks!!

@ Vicky, I have no idea what the means. Sorry!

@ Patchez, thanks a lot! What's happening at your end?

Solitaire said...

@ Backpakker, there are so many situations that can lead to incest, just as extramarital affairs.

@ Prachi, imagine how it must be for people who actually go through these situations when it is so hard for us to digest it in fictional stores.

Ghost Particle said...

sigh...human nature is no match for artificial culture.

divya said...

i guessed the ending di....brilliant work as always...


di, ur template rocks...but it hurts my eyes :P

freesherry said...

who are people to judge them?
they were kids who lost both the pillars of life.. their father to death and their mother to her own choices.. they had no one else to fill their void and they had no idea where it was going
a lot of people might judge the mother.. but may be drowning her in parties was her way of dealing with her loss, not the best way may be, but she had lost all her life to fate's card and she escaped into what she saw as the easiest way out.. and it was her kids who suffered..

Pri said...

uhoh ...incest??? :-/
now thaat was really unexpected...

i wonder if that really happens though...has anyone approached u with a similar psychological problem leading to such a relationship??

Silvara said...

interesting story - had an inkling of what it could be but u kept the suspense until the end....

I have heard of Genetic Mutual Attraction whereby related adults who have been separated at birth meet after so many years and are physically attracted to each other...

Silvara said...

Another thought - if incest is consensual - is it abuse??

Vandita said...

omg i only read abt this once in a magazine n cringed
but the build up kinda makes u think like it was goin to come...
brilliantly written as usual

elusive said...

excellent story..but hey to tell u the truth it did come to my mind in the middl of the story- kahi yeh sister toh nahi? am crazy plus guess after readin ur first story i was expectin a bhaari twist :p

shex said...

god of small things is plastered all over

ishqia said...

your ending always make my mouth hang open

Shruti said...

oh b..... hell! I heard an explosion in my head!!